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Mass Of The Sun by Underpable

Let me start by saying I really like the vast majority of what you produce, as well as the concept at work here. Cilestia being fat off...

sad pinkie by hoyeechun

This is my first critique so forgive any formalities I may overlook. Ok, negative thoughts first. Conceptually and visually there is no...

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Mass Of The Sun by Underpable
Let me start by saying I really like the vast majority of what you produce, as well as the concept at work here. Cilestia being fat off of cake is funny to even say and more amusing still as an image. Cilestia + cake is really common but I don't remember seeing this idea executed in exactly this way before.

However the image itself doesn't really do much for this concept. The biggest weakness holding this image back is the lack of proper focus. Every other image you produce has a fantastic usage of lines lighting and character expression to draw the observer into whatever position and mindset you want.

The lines in this image draw the viewer to the arch of her back when it seems like the main point of the joke is her expression and the text on the scale. The size of the thought bubble takes up a large amount of the image and means that the arch of her back is at the center, further emphasizing it.

Also she just doesn't look fat in this image. I know slenderness is part of your style and you use it well most of the time but here it works against you. Even if its just a subtle chub there needs to be something in this image that justifies her reaction more than the text on the scale.

The background is the same color as your subject. You know better. Not being hateful. You genuinely have much better technical skill than this in most of what I see in your gallery. Dynamic lighting, emotive characters and focus that is worthy of emulation is all over your work. This piece seems to strangely avoid everything you are good at with the exceptions of interesting situations and well executed facial expression.

I hope this wasn't too harsh and I certainly don't want to make you feel discouraged. I would be proud if I made this image, but you can and have proven that you are way better than this.
sad pinkie by hoyeechun
This is my first critique so forgive any formalities I may overlook. Ok, negative thoughts first. Conceptually and visually there is nothing really new here. Not only are you playing on some very basic character traits but you didn't really try to grow as an artist with this one. At least not that I can see. I only know this because I follow your work regularly and you are great at these head on adorable shots. But that's just it. Your already great at it. On top of that we see this kind of thing appear often within mlp fanart.

Now for the useless praise. Do I even have to say that its cute? I mean really, by now, you must know that your style and proportions mesh very well with the mlp character design. You take something already adorable and increase its adorability (shut up spell check) by a significant margin. Its totally expected but that's not a bad thing.

What got you 4 stars on the technique in this was actually the background. If left totally black the image would be unbalanced. If given a background similar to others you have done it would as well be unbalanced since you are violating established compositions rules with where pinkie and fluttershy are. Your choice of backgrounds was simple but did a great job of framing a pic that easily could have been awkward to look at.

That's my two cents anyway.
I took a break from working on my cards after the beta release.  It keeps me from betting burned out and when I came back I got a nice surprise.  Two of my close friends had been working on it and came up with some great ideas!  Mostly it was card effects and the balancing of the respective card types, according to their intended theme. 

It was such  a great moral booster. 

My next order of business is...

1.  Implement the balance modifications suggested (and proven viable) by my test group.

2.  Develop a play mat.  This will include a overworld map on one side that serves as the play area and also states the rules.  The other side will consist of lore and a charming little comic.

3.  Begin preparation for a march comic-toy convention.  This includes a full base set of cards (100+), packaging for both the decks, the packs, and the pack boxes as well as displays, a kickstarter, and an actual company name/logo.

I also need to look into what it takes to get a cartoon off the ground.  That is a lofty goal but I have no intention of playing a low risk strategy.  I want this dammit. 

     

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darkfanboy Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2014
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Valronic Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2014
neat!
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Cyn26 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2014
I am curious to know if you are planning to make some sort of pc game to go with it,since you have the capabilities? Or action figures or something since they are fairly easy to make
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Valronic Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Oh yes there is a vitual version in the works but unfortunately i have to put everything on hold until i get the legal side taken care of.  This may result in a much later future release.  However I wont forget the first folks who bought my game and I have every intention of throwin cool stuff your way.just give me some time. ^_^'
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CrystalTheHedgehog13 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2014  Student General Artist
Hey~ Thank you for letting me play and subsequently buy some decks of Regime at LexCon today! I'm really looking forward to where it goes! <3
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Valronic Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
I will keep you posted!  Due to a family emergency I have been a little slow in getting back to everyone but rest assured, there will be a great deal more in terms of events and cards.
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BlackKnight708 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2014
I fulfilled ur request!
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Valronic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014
This is awesome!  Wait...what request?
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BlackKnight708 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2014
You said to make more
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Averross Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014
Happy anniversary of your escape from the womb!
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